Hello, I made my edits in bold. :)
------
Dear Ms. Parmar, -Error #1: Add a period after "Ms."
I am writing to you to ask for your help!
As you know, keeping up to date with children's health policies is a key part of my role as an apprentice nursery nurse. It is important for me to have access to the policies online whilst I am at work. -Error #2: Change the comma after nurse to a period, and capitalize "it."
Unfortunately, due to an IT fault, my workplace access to the Internet is blocked at the moment. -Error #3: Capitalize "Internet."
I would be grateful if you could look into this as soon as possible. -Error #4: Change the question mark after "possible" to a period.
It is preventing me from doing my job properly, and I worry that I will fall behind in my placement if it continues for much longer. -Error #5: Add a space in between "my" and "job."
I look forward to hearing from you!
Kind regards,
Charlotte
I hope this helps! Feel free to give me Brainliest if you feel this helped. Have a good day, and good luck on your assignment. :)
